Address Jory's feedback

Author: benjie

src/pages/blog/2024-07-22-graphql-local-initiative.mdx

@@ -12,9 +12,10 @@ culture of community and innovation. Local get-togethers play a crucial role in
 this, bringing together developers, library maintainers, vendors, and
 enthusiasts to share knowledge and collaborate.
 
-This is why we're pleased to announce the launch of the **GraphQL Local
-Initiative**. This initiative aims to recognize and support local efforts by
-providing a framework and resources for organizing local GraphQL events.
+That's why we've expanded our support for local communities with the launch of
+the **GraphQL Local Initiative**. This initiative aims to recognize and support
+local efforts by providing a framework and resources for organizing local
+GraphQL events.
 
 ## What the GraphQL Local Initiative Offers
 

src/pages/community/foundation/local-initiative.mdx

@@ -19,8 +19,11 @@ enthusiasts to share knowledge and collaborate.
 
 To better support these meets and clarify the process, we are excited to
 announce the official **GraphQL Local** initiative. This initiative provides a
-framework for organizing local GraphQL user groups and offers support each approved
-group (hereafter, a "Local"). Here’s what you need to know to get involved:
+framework for organizing local GraphQL user groups and offers support to each
+approved group (hereafter, a "Local").
+
+We're happy to support both new and existing GraphQL meets; here’s what you
+need to know to get involved:
 
 ## Requirements
 
@@ -33,7 +36,9 @@ Organizers of a Local must agree:
 - The Local accepts **GraphQL TSC oversight**:
   - At least one
     [GraphQL Technical Steering Committee (TSC) member](https://github.com/graphql/graphql-wg/blob/main/GraphQL-TSC.md#tsc-members)
-    must have administrator access to the Local’s online platforms.
+    must be granted administrator access to the Local’s online platforms (we
+    will assign a TSC member and supply the relevant details on approval of
+    your Local).
   - In case of a serious Code of Conduct breach, an organizer may be replaced.
 - The Local has 1 or more organizer from the area. (We're pretty flexible on the
   definition of "from the area", just be reasonable.)
@@ -75,36 +80,35 @@ event:
   - Schedule
   - Speaker/talk introduction
 - **Promotion** through GraphQL’s Twitter and LinkedIn channels.
-- **Custom artwork** adhering to the GraphQL Brand Guidelines; including
+- **Local artwork** adhering to the GraphQL Brand Guidelines; including
   avatars, event banners, and slide templates. \*\*
 
-\* The content of swag bundles may change from time to time. At time of writing
-they are likely to consist of 2-3 t-shirts (sizes to be chosen by organizer),
-stickers, pin-badges, and a GraphQL bow-tie!
+\* The content of swag bundles may change from time to time depending on
+available inventory.
 
-\*\* There may be a significant delay on the delivery of custom artwork
+\*\* There may be a significant delay on the delivery of local artwork
 currently, we're still figuring out designs.
 
 ## Approved Costs
 
 Sponsorship funds may be used towards:
 
 - Food (be sure to consider dietary restrictions and allergies)
-- Non-alcoholic drinks (alcoholic beverages require sponsor approval or should
-  be paid out of alternative funds)
+- Non-alcoholic drinks (alcoholic beverages, if provided, require sponsor
+  approval or should be paid out of alternative funds)
 - Venue hire
 - Swag for speakers or attendees
 - Promotional materials
 - AV resources (e.g., camera stand, microphone)
 
-If your GraphQL Local application is approved you will be provided with
-invoicing instructions.
+On approval of your GraphQL Local you will be provided with invoicing
+instructions.
 
 ## Caveats
 
 All support is subject to the finite resources (both financial and temporal) of
 the GraphQL Local initiative. Sponsorship may be adjusted both up and down based
-on expected attendance and is discretionary. Bespoke work, e.g. custom artwork,
+on expected attendance and is discretionary. Bespoke work, e.g. local artwork,
 may have long and unpredictable lead times. Your application may be declined for
 any reason, but in particular if we think it is likely that the initiative will
 exhaust its budget we will decline all further applications until more budget
@@ -122,11 +126,11 @@ often with a small ask such as saying a few words about them during the event.
 If your gathering is approved, you will be provided with contact information for
 member organizations who have expressed interest in supporting gatherings.
 
-## Apply now!
+## Get in Touch Now!
 
 We’re excited to see the GraphQL community grow and thrive through these
-gatherings. For more information or to apply for official recognition and
-support, please contact us on `operations@graphql.org`:
+gatherings. For more information or to get started, please contact us on
+`operations@graphql.org`:
 
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